Teacher Notes: I appreciate your effort on this essay; however, I think it would benefit from a lot of revision. First, I think there are several paragraphs that can be combined or even removed from this essay and replaced with more detailed evidence and analysis. You tend to repeat that women were oppressed and stood up against oppression, but you don’t offer any evidence from the text. Try to show how the women rebelled rather than simply repeating it. To do that, focus on the details in the text. Analyze the conversations. For instance, when you discuss the bird, provide more detail and context. What happened in the scenes surrounding the bird? What conversations took place? How does this show that women were oppressed? How does this lead to rebellion? Answering some of these questions, with detailed evidence from the text may help strengthen your argument. Also, be sure to revise your wording. Avoid trying to use big vocabulary. I appreciate you trying to add sophistication to your language, but this sometimes has the counter-effect as it adds a lack of clarity. Use more simple and direct language to better get your point across. I have left several comments in the margins to help you with all the suggestions above, so please see my marginal (and rubric) notes for more detailed feedback. 🙂
This is the essay instructions to have a better understanding what to revise
Purpose: Our last stop to furthering our study of literature is drama and film. Drama quite literally comes from a Greek word meaning “action”. In plays, this action is meant to be demonstrated in front of a live audience and in film, the action progresses on a screen. Both follow the same types of rules as any story (plot, character, conflict, climax, resolution), except film can cinematically push more boundaries. We often get lost in the action and don’t notice the nuances of this type of literature, and that is why our next essay will be an analysis of drama or film; it will be a specific exploration of a select theme or significant symbolism associated with a particular theme.
Assignment: Develop the theme of rebelling against male oppression by analyzing the symbolism in Trifles (a murder mystery that is solved by housewives through their observation of what appears to be frivolous things) or A Doll’s House(a view of 19th century marriage, especially a woman’s place in it.) You can make a connection between the two but just choose ONE TO FOCUS ON.
Essays must be in MLA format – typed, double-spaced, 12-point font.
* Essays must be approximately 4 pages
HUM2052: Civ 2: Renaissance-Modern, Fall 2021, Sect. 05
, you have two options to pick from. –6 pages, double-spaced, size 12 font.
The Industrial Revolution is thought to have improved the material standard of living for most people in Britain (by lowering the cost of basic staples like food and clothing) when compared to pre-industrial Britain when most people worked in agriculture and made the majority of the products they used themselves often at great cost in terms of time and labor.
In lowering the cost of basic products through more efficient mass production, the Industrial Revolution also created a life for workers both inside and outside the mills and factories that Orwell describes in his book as miserable.
Given the tradeoffs inherent in industrial production, take a position where you argue either for or against (or for a some balance between the two) economic development that raises material standard of living (by lowering cost of living) but does so through work that some find dehumanizing.
2. In the first chapter, Orwell described the meals provided by the Brookers to their lodgers. These meals were non-nutritious and in no way sated a man’s hunger. How is this nutritional issue and the role of the Brookers as caregivers to their renters symbolic of other themes in his book, such as how the intellectual class see the country’s need for Socialism to improve the life of the poor?
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Teacher Notes: I appreciate your effort on this explication and you make some good points; however, your explication is missing a great deal of literary analysis and support. To begin, consider quoting more directly from the poem. Next, focus on the poetic devices in each line. This poem has a great deal of hyperbole. Analyze the use of this poetry technique and explain how it helps establish the theme. You mention that there are a lot of poetic devices in the poem, but you don’t really develop any of them in your explication. There is also simile, which would benefit from closer examination. Overall, good effort on this assignment! Feel free to revise based on my feedback for a more improved explication and grade. I have left several comments in the margins, so please review my marginal and rubric notes for more detailed feedback.
INSTRUCTIONS ON THE WRITTEN ESSAY TO UNDERSTAND WHAT TO REVISE:
Unit 2: Poetry Explication
Purpose: To further our study of literature, we come across different types of poetry. Of course, we are no strangers to this form of writing, stereotypically classified as short, pretty and often rhyming. Many of us have learned to read by hearing the sounds and rhythms of poetry. Many of us may have written our own lines or received verse as a gift from somebody (think Valentine’s Day!). We may have even studied it closely in high school or college. From these experiences, many will admit that poetry, though beautiful, is often difficult to understand. Since it reflects such an integral part of the writer’s consciousness and mentality, it is often perplexing (like a puzzle we are trying to figure out). This is why our next assignment is meant to be both challenging and interesting. I ask that you make a smart selection of a poem (by smart, I mean to consider a few technicalities such as length, time, and purpose), and explicate it. Explication is a type of analysis, in which you must do a close reading of your chosen poem and show how the poem’s literary techniques contribute to the development of its theme. If done correctly, explications help us understand and appreciate poetry on a deeper level.
Texts: Select one poem from our unit. They are too many to list, but please consult pages 363-625. You must present your poem, in its entirety before beginning your explication.
Assignment: Write a poetry explication using one poem from our unit.
Please follow the steps below (which can also be found in the chart explication chart I provided in class – on the modules page-) in order to complete a successful explication:
Choose a strong poem and read it at least three times (preferable out loud)
Paraphrase the poem line-by-line. This is a translation of each line completely in your own words
Determine the context of the poem. To figure out the context, answer questions relating to: who, what, when, where, why, and how.
Determine the theme or overall message of the poem. If you think there is more than one, then choose the one you wish to focus on.
List all the literary techniques you can find. This includes: diction, persona, allusion, denotation, connotation, imagery, tone, figurative language, sound, rhythm, and structure.
Narrow down these literary techniques to fit: your chosen theme (which techniques are most relevant to the theme) and how.
Writing an Explication:
Please note: an explication is a line-by-line explanation of a poem from beginning to end. “Explain” is the key This is different from a thesis-support paper because it doesn’t follow a logical structure (thesis supporting reasons); instead, it has a chronological structure that unfolds or reveals the meaning(s) of a poem as it develops from beginning to end.
Guidelines and Structure of Writing an Explication:
You want to start by simply presenting your interpretation of the poem’s overall meaning and start explicating immediately. Don’t worry about writing a formal introduction with a thesis; remember, this is not a formal thesis-based essay, but rather, an explication.
The first line or lines of the explication should describe the situation of the speaker and declare the central subject of the poem, identify the most significant conflict(s) or tension(s) surrounding this subject, and present your interpretation of the overall message or theme of the poem.
Next, you should continue to explicate the poem’s central meaning line by line, expanding the discussion of the meaning and conflict in terms of the elements of poetry that we have discussed in this unit: diction, imagery, speaker and tone, figurative language, symbolism, allusion, sound and rhythm. That is, you should explain the overall meaning of the poem by focusing on how the poet has used these elements of poetry to construct this meaning.
Each “section” of the poem (stanza or grouping of text) can be explicated in a separate paragraph in the explication. If the poem has no stanzas, you are to determine (decide) which lines constitute a “section” or “grouping” of the poem and structure your explication accordingly.
The end of the explication should discuss any or all of the below:Any final thoughts on the overall meaning of the poem
The value of experiencing the poem
Your personal connection to the poem
Finally, because this is not a formal essay, there is no page requirement for this explication. I am simply looking for a deep, thorough analysis and understanding of the poem. Each explication, however, should contain, at least 4 paragraphs:Introduction to overall meaning/theme of the poem
Line by line explication of one stanza/grouping of text
Line by line explication of another stanza/grouping of the textIf your poem has more than two stanzas/groupings, I expect more paragraphs with a “line by line” explication.
Conclusion on overall meaning and writer’s connection to the poem.
I have all the comments from the instructor to revise an essay. I will also include the pictures of comments on the essay
Teacher’s notes: – you make some excellent points in this essay, especially in your final body paragraph. However, I think your essay would benefit from more evidence to support your points. To begin, consider revising your thesis to include the points you make in your final body paragraph. Emily is sympathetic because we see that her actions are a direct result of her desperate need for companionship. She’s lonely and isolated, but this isn’t due to her arrogance. She wants to love and be loved, and so she whatever she can to keep companions by her side. To make that argument stronger, you may also want to quote more from the reading. Provide evidence to show why Emily is sympathetic. Overall, I think this essay has a great deal of potential. I would focus less on Emily’s arrogance or bizarre behavior, and more on trying to explain and understand it based on the clues we are given in the text. See my marginal and rubric comments for more detailed feedback, and overall, good work!
THIS WAS THE ESSAY INSTRUCTIONS :Essay #1: Character Analysis
In both “A Tale-Tell Heart” and “A Rose for Emily,” we are introduced to protagonists who have a distorted view of reality. In a “Tell-Tell Heart,” the narrator promises us that “he isn’t mad,” but we know better. In “A Rose for Emily,” though we never personally meet Emily, based on what the townspeople say about her, we gain a fairly strong understanding of her lack of sanity. While both characters clearly have a distorted view of reality, they are the protagonists, and therefore, we often find ourselves rooting for them.
Write an essay in which you provide a character analysis of either Emily from “A Rose for Emily,” OR the narrator from “A Tell-Tale Heart,” and examine how the character development deepens our understanding of the protagonist’s distorted reality. Be sure to identify what character aspects (if any) allow us to sympathize with them. Can we really sympathize with someone who is so far removed from reality?
Purpose: To begin our study of literature, particularly short fiction, it is crucial to practice close reading. This includes scrutinizing and evaluating important words, phrases, and passages from the text in order to have a better understanding of the story’s point of view, characters, setting, tone and style, themes, and symbols. This assignment will focus on studying characters, which are what add life to stories. They also help use better understand the themes, motifs, symbolism and more in stories. They do so by helping us better understand writers’ intentions and sometimes even motivations, which are not always literally revealed on the page. Sometimes we must read between the lines and offer our own opinions and interpretations in order to analyze successfully. This is what you will be asked to do in our first essay assignment.
– When (if) providing a character analysis, consider answering some of these questions in your analysis: does he/she undergo important changes, what are the facets of his/her personality or behavior, what is his/her relationship with other characters, what important actions does he/she take that helps us understand his/her character, what important conflicts does he/she encounter and how does he/she address or resolve those conflicts, and so on?
– Throughout this quarter, you are expected to work from the details of the text and employ “close reading” of short passages. A close reading is an examination of a passage in detail—line by line, sentence by sentence, thought by thought. On the basis of what you find, you should present a unified thesis or reading of the text. Be sure to find detailed passages from the text to help strengthen your analysis. Use a combination of quotes and paraphrases.
-Remember to always work towards internalizing the text, moving beyond a superficial reading of the words to a deeper understanding of the meaning of and motivation behind the words.
* Essays must be about 4 pages, typed in MLA format.